Okay so it looks like I fell off the planet. Promise - I'm still here. The last four years have been ... hard. There's no other word for it. Everything is fine. I'm fine, but I've been the caregiver of my mom who has Dementia. Between her needs, work, etc I seem to have lost control of my time. I am still writing and am trying hard to get back to my blog.

In case you weren't aware Phaze and HSWF which where under the Mundania Umbrella have closed. I was smart enough to get my titles back before all this happened. I'm happy to say the three books I sold to HSWF have been picked up by Melange Books and are available through their Satin Books imprint. I have even sold a new title to them called Magical Quest due out in 2022

I have also been lucky enough to find a publisher for my Vespian Way series. I'm now with Blushing Books under the name of Bethany Drake. I have five titles out with them right now and am close to submitting two more. There's Desire's Destiny, Desire's Duty and Desire's Promise. Then there is two in my werewolf series, Tears of the Queen and Legend of the Tears. I have just finished the rough draft of the third book in the series and have plans for a fourth one the moment I submit it.

I'll probably still be sporadic here on the blog. Unless I win the lottery and can hire someone to help me I can't avoid it, but know I'm still here still working hard in the background and am hoping to do better at keeping my blog alive.

Barb:)



Wednesday, December 16, 2015

Writing Down the Bones: Part 13 Sentence Structure #onwriting

We're almost done with this handout titled Writing the Popular Novel by Janice Bennett and as bad as I've been at posting it I'm hoping to do them all this week so all I have to do is release them. We'll see how this goes...

So if you remember you're polishing that wonderful manuscript of yours. This time we're going to look at the sentence structure.

1.) Are your sentences varied in length.? Have you mixed up the type of sentences - use of clauses, and over all structure?

2.) Does the length of your sentence, word choice and overall tone match the mood of each scene?

3.) Are any of your characters doing things that conflict with their personality? How about the scene? Are they doing conflicting actions at the same time?

4.) Have you avoided using the "to be" verb and their substitutes? The ones Janice names are feel, seem, look and appear.

5.) Have you avoided starting your sentences with "There is" and "There was." The next part is what I've seen as an editor. Are the beginnings of your sentences varied? Have you started a lot of sentences with he or she. Have you reworked those sentences so they start with something else?

6.) This one is one of my favorites - I've always heard of it as floating body parts. but Janice asks if there are any eyeballs running around the scenery.

7.) And have you removed those great cliches we all seem to use in the rough draft?

Only two more posts to go on this one.

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